Did I Do Anything Wrong With Content? Please Advise

@Blogzandstuff ... The error was on this article only. I think I was too overwhelmed with the project, and I didn't have enough ideas to make it read better. I do have an iWriter account with a 5-star writer rating. I only felt something was wrong with this article, and I am glad I got some feedback on it.

@sarahk ... This was actually my first article that didn't make sense to the client. This challenge is an eye opener for sure. I am certain this is a problem that I can fix to avoid losing a client in future.

Thank you for being honest.

 

You have multiple grammatical and syntax errors in this article. And your use of colloquialisms are "not quite right," as well. Some mistakes are very similar to ones that I explicitly pointed out to you in a previous thread, so it is clear that you have done little to improve your skills in this area since that last thread. No matter how clever or creative your articles may be, if they do not use proper English, most readers absolutely will be turned off and anyone paying you for an article will be highly disappointed unless they, too, know little about the English language.

If you are looking for someone to correct your article and teach you proper English via this thread, your expectations are way too high. You have gotten an answer to your question about why the article was rejected from a few members who are native speakers. @qwikad.com @sarahk and @Matthew Sayle write English very well. I have been reading their posts for quite some time. I used to tutor college students in English composition, so I happen to know what I am talking about, too. The buyer was right: the article, because of its technical flaws, completely detracts from any potential value the reader might receive from its message.

 

I made many mistakes in the article, and I agree. I am doing the best I can to ensure I do not repeat the same mistake in the future. Thank you for being honest. I appreciate.

Do have a lovely week.

 

Your article is good but there are grammar lapses. I think its juts normal. Try to write more and surely you get the work around.

 

@Dario McNut I am a good writer, and I believe I can do better in future. I have started reading some novels and inspirational books to make my English, grammar to be precise, better. I am hoping this will help me, mostly because I want to spend the next few years writing articles for my clients. Thank you.

 

Thank you @sarahk. I believe there is always room for improvement, and I am going to use the little time I have to learn something new everyday. Thanks again.

 

According to me you need to add a positive point in this article.